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Suddenly Sarah heard someone shouting about help in the forest. She crept slowly through the forest and the voice began to be heard more clearly. She continued and followed the voice despite the fact that it was raining a lot. When she arrived, she saw an old house and at the same time noticed that the sound had disappeared. Then Sarah decided to spend the night in the house as she missed the way back to her home. She knocked on the door but no one answered, and she noticed that the door was open and went into the house. 

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Suddenly Sarah heard a shout for help comming from the forest. She slowly crept through the thick shrubbery towards the direction of the voice and it became clearer and clearer. Dispite the rain she kept wandering towards the voice determand to find its origin. distracted by the bellow of the voice, she barely noticed an old house inside a clearing of the trees. As she approached the building however, the sound of the voice subsided. 

Cold and soaked through all of her clothes, Sarah dicided that she had to spend the night in the dilapidated house. She knocked on the rotted door but there was no awnser. She did however notice that the door was slightly ajar so she desided to enter.

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Tella skrev:

Kan någon rätta till mig hur kan jag skriva bättre

Suddenly Sarah heard someone shouting about help in the forest. She crept slowly through the forest and the voice began to be heard more clearly. She continued and followed the voice despite the fact that it was raining a lot. When she arrived, she saw an old house and at the same time noticed that the sound had disappeared. Then Sarah decided to spend the night in the house as she missed the way back to her home. She knocked on the door but no one answered, and she noticed that the door was open and went into the house. 

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Suddenly Sarah heard a shout for help comming from the forest. She slowly crept through the thick shrubbery towards the direction of the voice and it became clearer and clearer. Dispite the rain she kept wandering towards the voice determand to find its origin. distracted by the bellow of the voice, she barely noticed an old house inside a clearing of the trees. As she approached the building however, the sound of the voice subsided. 

Cold and soaked through all of her clothes, Sarah dicided that she had to spend the night in the dilapidated house. She knocked on the rotted door but there was no awnser. She did however notice that the door was slightly ajar so she desided to enter.

 

hoppas det hjälpte

Vill även tillägga att shrubbery betyder buskage, typ buskar och snår och dilapidated betyder nedgånget, kan vara lite svåra ord så du kanske vill hitta synonymer till dessa:)