Argumeterande essä

Behöver lite hjälp med min inledande tes för Engelska essän. Jag skriver om att man ska göra school uniforms mandatory. Jag satsar på A, så ge mig all kritik som ni vill.

"It's a fact that bullying is one of the biggest concern in school these days. Students are being harassed physically, verbally, and socially. The cause of bullying often stems from people being different for not wearing the “right” clothes. School have nowadays become more of an fashion show rather than education, which school is all about. It's all about having the newest designer clothes, otherwise your not going with the "flow". Appearance and popularity is mostly what the students are focusing on. In other words, school is not longer the same school as it used to be, it's a place where students are divided into "pricetags". The most  "ones", are the popular kids, whereas the "cheaper" ones are the outcasts." 

Give me what you got!