Argumentative Speech - Civic Courage: A Driving Force for Significant Change or Overrated Virtue?
Jag skrev min text inför första uppgiften som fanns på uppdrag 5 och som jag frågade efter innan..
Skulle någon se ifall jag behöver lägga till något?
Greta Thunberg
Greta Thunberg born in Stockholm in 2003. She is one of the most well-known climate campaigners worldwide. Greta started her "School strike for the climate"—also known as the "Strike outside the Riksdag house in Stockholm—on August 20, 2018. She continued her strike every day until the September 2018 parliamentary elections, at which point it was extended to every Friday. The strike aims to align Swedish policy with the Paris Agreement, a worldwide climate accord that aims to decrease greenhouse gas emissions and provide assistance to individuals impacted by climate change. The dedication of her and other young people has brought attention to the climate issue on a global scale.
Before Greta's demonstration, there were quite a lot of gas emissions. There was a lot of dirty air. Thanks to her, after her demonstration, there were big changes. Many children, youths, women and men began to think about it. They started thinking, for example, that instead of taking the car to the store, I can either cycle or walk. This led to less emissions and fresher air. Greta is an important person, she started demonstrating from a young age. Which is great because older people would never have dared to fight and fight against the climate. Without her, we now have a really bad climate.
Ja, det är definitivt en fin text. Något som du kanske skulle kunna tänka på är att du borde kunna stödja dina argument med källor. Den första paragrafen är bra, eftersom den visar konkret vad Greta har gjort för klimatet, men sen i den andra paragrafen skriver du till exempel att "thanks to her, after her demonstration, there were big changes", utan att riktigt visa vilka ändringar som gjordes. Du kan ju skriva till exempel att hon inspirerade många andra ungdommar till att börja protestera för klimatet, eller att hon vann Time Person of the Year.
Problemet med att skriva till exempel att "this led to less emissions and fresher air", är att du i så fall måste kunna visa en direkt länk mellan Gretas handlingar och förminskade koldioxid utsläpp, vilket är väldigt svårt att göra. Annars skulle din motståndare bara kunna säga att Greta minsann inte alls ledde till mindre utsläpp, och i så fall skulle du inte riktigt ha klara motargument till det. Personligen skulle jag nog fokusera mer på sånt som hur känd Greta blev, och hur mycket hon inspirerade andra, vilket du ju helt klart kan stödja.
Tack!
Funkar det bra nu?
Greta Thunberg
Greta Thunberg born in Stockholm in 2003. She is one of the most well-known climate campaigners worldwide. Greta started her "School strike for the climate"—also known as the "Strike outside the Riksdag house in Stockholm—on August 20, 2018. She continued her strike every day until the September 2018 parliamentary elections, at which point it was extended to every Friday. The strike aims to align Swedish policy with the Paris Agreement, a worldwide climate accord that aims to decrease greenhouse gas emissions and provide assistance to individuals impacted by climate change. The dedication of her and other young people has brought attention to the climate issue on a global scale.
Before Greta's demonstration, there were quite a lot of gas emissions. The Air was very dirty. She inspired many other young people to start protesting for the climate. Many children, youth, women and men began to think, well why not? Why can't we make a change to our beautiful world? They also began to think, for example, that instead of taking the car to the store, I can instead either cycle or walk. This can lead to lower emissions. Greta is an important person, she started demonstrating from a young age. Which is great because older people would never have dared to fight against the climate. There are still emissions, yes, but she made people wake up and ask themselves "what are we doing, we have to do something". But yes, from person to person there are different thoughts about the climate.
Det fattas ett verb i den allra första meningen.
Smaragdalena skrev:Det fattas ett verb i den allra första meningen.
Vilket?
Was eller is eller nånting.
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Greta Thunberg was born in Stockholm in 2003.
Nu?
