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Postad: 5 nov 2023 18:14

A good life

A good life 

 

Firstly, in order to reach a good life there are important things to do or to  have. It depends on each person how they  put them in order, because I believe that we are different. If you ask most of the people they will say these three things: Social life, Money and health. By social life I mean Friends, family  and relatives. The fact that  most of  us feel better when they are with their friends is something relatable. Relatives, family or even our partner are the most important people in our life. We really need to spend more time with them, because they give us power, love and support, so why not meet them twice a week, for example and have a family day. Therefore, we absolutely like to have good health, so we can do our daily plans and to avoid sickness.  Money  comes in third place, that does not mean we do not need it. We all want to have a good house or  the best school for our kids. All  that is dependent  on our financial ability, so money is a need in our lives. 

 

 

For me a good life is actually based on the last three things that I just named, but I would like to mention one more thing, which is  education. To study is such a big responsibility I put on myself. I always think that education is my future, because nowadays if you do not have education you would not find the job you want or even reach your goals in life. I consider that in our present it is almost free to study and get more knowledge, so why not?  In my opinion education is one of the keys to reach a good life. 

 

Secondly, the fact that we have changed is really painful, when we visit our lovers less than we did before and we fight alot. It is getting more and more complicated. I wonder what our future kids think about life, when we are representing that bad idea, not the opposite. I consider that we need to change our way of thinking and be more open to discuss with each other  and be honest and trust one another, so our future generation can learn positive things about life.The next generation will be really smart I believe, so it is always good to learn what mistakes people made  before you, that you can avoid in you future life, in order to reach a good life yourselves. 


Finally, we are all different, and also all want to have an amazing life, where we are loved and supported. It is not easy to be perfect , or not to make mistakes in life, so instead we can learn from our mistakes and correct them, but also learn from others and teach them if we are able to. 

 

 

Now that you have made it to here why do not you leave a good feedbacke , so I can get better:) Thanks

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Postad: 5 dec 2023 22:03

It'd be great if you could tell us what type of text you're trying to write.

In my opinion the structure needs more work. It's best to start with an introduction to give readers a bit of background and to make your text easier to digest + finish the text with a summary. Also, there are a few spacing and grammatical errors. 

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